storytelling, week 11 - the creation of the mermaid
The Creation of the Mermaid
The whale created the oceans, far and wide, deep and shallow, black and blue. He created the plants that bloomed vibrantly through the waving currents, and he created the sand that shimmered abundantly beneath the weight of the water. The whale also created the live that happily swam among the tides. The whale was proud and very content with his creation, but one day he decided there should be another creation, none like he has ever made before. It shall be called a mermaid, because of its man like-features.
The whale gathered the animals that lived in his ocean, and held a meeting that would decide what the new creation should consist of. Each animal had its own thoughts of what the new life should be.
The clown fish thought the mermaid should be orange and white, just like him. The shark thought it should have razor sharp teeth, so it could hunt better than any other fish. The tuna thought the mermaid should be agile and very large, to cut and dive through any form of danger. The animals continued making assumptions of what the mermaid should look like. Each assumption resembled unique characters of suggester.
Although the whale was appreciative for the plethora of ideas, he knew the mermaid could not be like any other creature. He decided the mermaid would have a top that looked like a man. Man was beneficial and successful on land, and whale wanted those qualities in his oceans. But with legs and feet, the mermaid would not thrive under the sea. It shall have a tail that resembles a fish, long, strong, and covered in scales. The mermaid will be able to power through the waves without any trouble, while still keeping its human-like figure.
The whale spent all night creating the mermaid, and the next morning he brought his creation to live. The mermaid was thankful to have been created, and spent eternity living happily and graciously under water.
Authors Note: This story comes from a tale from the Native American section. The coyote creates the world, and decided he wants to create man as well. He gather all the other animals and lets them decide what the man should look like. They all described qualities that resembled themselves. The coyote thought his ideas were the best, so he created a man that did not include any characteristics of the other animals.
The whale created the oceans, far and wide, deep and shallow, black and blue. He created the plants that bloomed vibrantly through the waving currents, and he created the sand that shimmered abundantly beneath the weight of the water. The whale also created the live that happily swam among the tides. The whale was proud and very content with his creation, but one day he decided there should be another creation, none like he has ever made before. It shall be called a mermaid, because of its man like-features.
The whale gathered the animals that lived in his ocean, and held a meeting that would decide what the new creation should consist of. Each animal had its own thoughts of what the new life should be.
The clown fish thought the mermaid should be orange and white, just like him. The shark thought it should have razor sharp teeth, so it could hunt better than any other fish. The tuna thought the mermaid should be agile and very large, to cut and dive through any form of danger. The animals continued making assumptions of what the mermaid should look like. Each assumption resembled unique characters of suggester.
Although the whale was appreciative for the plethora of ideas, he knew the mermaid could not be like any other creature. He decided the mermaid would have a top that looked like a man. Man was beneficial and successful on land, and whale wanted those qualities in his oceans. But with legs and feet, the mermaid would not thrive under the sea. It shall have a tail that resembles a fish, long, strong, and covered in scales. The mermaid will be able to power through the waves without any trouble, while still keeping its human-like figure.
The whale spent all night creating the mermaid, and the next morning he brought his creation to live. The mermaid was thankful to have been created, and spent eternity living happily and graciously under water.
Authors Note: This story comes from a tale from the Native American section. The coyote creates the world, and decided he wants to create man as well. He gather all the other animals and lets them decide what the man should look like. They all described qualities that resembled themselves. The coyote thought his ideas were the best, so he created a man that did not include any characteristics of the other animals.
Creation of Man
Miwok (San Joaquin Valley, Cal.)
mermaid
Gracie,
ReplyDeleteI like this retelling. I think your transition from the coyote and land animals to the whale and the creation of the mermaid is very creative. I've also found the idea of mermaids intriguing so it was extra fun to read. The only suggestion I would make is to review your use of "live" and "life". I think towards the end of the story you meant to say "The next morning he brought his creation to life". other than that, great work!